Thursday, June 17

Later?

– Tickle me!
– Not now, hurry up.
– Come on mom, tickle me.
– Not here. Later.
– Now, mom. Tiiiiickle me!
– Jimmy, not now, please. Faster, there's the door.

         – Excuse me, ma’am, the oncology children’s wing is by appointment only.
         – Yes, we have an appointment, thank you.

– Tickle me.
– No! Hurry.
– Why? Are we late?
– No. Not yet.

This piece is for '55 Flash Fiction Friday' and I wish it was fiction. The idea is to tell a story in 55 words. To try one yourself and/or read others go see g-man.

21 comments:

  1. oh man...i dont even know what to say...i have walked that hall...

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  2. I have been in an oncology unit for a child who eventually died..................I have never gotten over it.

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  3. Kids will be kids; can't blame them for not understanding the gravity.

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  4. Makes me sad to think of kids in places like this.

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  5. So sad. More tickles are definitely called for.

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  6. Poor mom. Can't blame her, I guess.

    Another well crafted 55, Lorenzo.

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  7. Sad....But I LOVE the hidden message.
    You Rock!
    Excellent 55 My Friend.
    Thank you for playing, thanks for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...Galen

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  8. Children need to be free to be children even when they have cancer. You have given us a lot to think about with a mere 55 words.

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  9. so much said in so few words...

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  10. Last night we visited a birthday-lady who is dying of cancer--really. And she said in that weak voice, "Bring your violin"...and so I got to "tickle her" with a few old tunes. Sad, but then maybe not all sad...

    Good "55". thanks.

    Here is MINE

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  11. Our parallels today are a little scary.

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  12. Very moving. Drew me right in. Some people need all the tickling they can get. . .

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  13. Always take time to tickle and be tickled.

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  14. Laughter is the best medicine. I need more of it! Mandatory family tickling time tomorrow, that's it!

    Happy weekend, Lorenzo.

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  15. A great 55. Sometimes we should all just tickle, tickle, tickle...

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  16. Why do we hurry so when what would really feed our souls is stopping to tickle ourselves and each other?

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  17. Interesting poem, and lots and lots of visual food for thought, I like the hope of the last line

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  18. dammit! That comment is meant for today's poem (duh!)

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  19. brilliant.
    and haunting
    and true

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