Friday, May 14

55 Flash Fiction Friday

Chat

Me
Hi, Sue.
It’s you isn’t it?
Hello?
Sue?

Sue
Yes

Me
Wow!
Wow!!
Been at least 6, 7 years?

Sue
11 and a half.

Me
This is so amazing I could find you!!

Sue
Yeah?

Me
Yes!!

Sue
Robert, I’m still in the same house where we lived.

Me
Great!!!

Sue is off-line

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This is a flash fiction piece for '55 Flash Fiction Friday'. The idea is to tell a story in 55 words with at least one character and a discernible plot. My first stab at this. For more, go see g-man.

27 comments:

  1. Oooooooh. That is GOOD one!

    And the last line says it all.

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  2. Well...We all lose track of time don't we?
    hehehehe
    Excellent 55 My Friend.
    Thank you for your contribution, I hope that you found this to be creative, challenging, and fun. Thanks for visiting, and join us again next Friday...Have a Kick Ass Week-End..
    Galen

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  3. If you've got more like this one up your sleeve I hope you're back often. Cos this one rocks! Great debut.

    (And I love your comment intro too!)

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  4. How time flies when you're having fun...
    Great post!

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  5. I like it alot!!!!
    No other comment I can get fired up

    Thanks for joining us

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  6. whew..11 years...how time flies...right where you left her. nice 55. glad you joined up this week.

    my 55 is up!

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  7. I like this a lot! I hope you come back and give us more.

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  8. Hi, Lorenzo. Thank you very much for your kind comments at my place. It's so nice to meet you!

    I love this one, because it tells a story and makes a strong point. The last line is a fantastic ending. It's great how in just 55 words of conversation, you paint a scene for the reader (I can even picture the people). You have inspired me to give it a try.

    I'll definitely return and check out more of your site. It looks awesome.

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  9. your first ever 55 was awesome! amazing how the truth will put such an abrupt stop in our way :) i can't wait for more!!

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  10. Oh my gosh! This was really funny :)! I have a feeling you have a fabulous sense of humor. You often make me laugh.

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  11. this is so COOL and GREAT!
    Welcome to 55!
    see you next week?
    Mine is here
    Have you an AWESOME weekend!
    hugs
    shakira

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  12. Oh, Lorenzo, this was vivid and poignant and funny too. Welcome to flashing. So many creative people gathered under one "roof." Mine will be up Friday.

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  13. Another interesting piece by you Lorenzo--- I do not think I ever said anything in 55 words even my comments -- Yikes!
    You are a master versatile virtuoso, or said another way skillfully adapt at writing whatever style you chose.

    The other 55ers will be dazzled as they get to read some of your works.

    Have a good week end.

    Joanny

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  14. Lorenzo ~ excellent first contribution ~ I hope to see more, more, more. Loved the 55 and so very often true of those chats. Loved the last line. Sue is a smart woman!

    I'm up:
    Friday Flash 55 ~ Silvia's Smile

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  15. it is fresh and powerful,
    love the humor and playfulness...

    superb 55.

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  16. Thanks everyone for the encouraging reaction to my first 55 Flash Fiction Friday. Now, that I think about it, this is probably my first piece of fiction period. It's a real treat to see so many new 'faces' today...


    I'll be gone for a couple of day and will not be blogging. A couple of quick comments from me ...

    G-Man: Yes, I did find it fun and challenging and am enjoying meeting other participants. Thanks.

    Julie: it's a treat to see you here. I am really enjoying your blog.

    Joanny: Thanks for the effusive compliment, but I think I am more of a baffler than a dazzler (if you recall the old saying about "if you can't dazzle them with brilliance, then ... I won't go on)

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  17. What talent!! Loved this so very much. With a short 55 words, you painted us a picture. Great job.

    My 55 for the week, is HERE As always, scroll down past my Friday's Show n Tell to find it. Have a glorious day.

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  18. Very good, I love the use of chat - so much potential in it, isn't there?

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  19. yes very well done and welcome to our places through cyber space and visit one another enjoyed you and will return again.


    Loving Memories

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  20. Very well done and as chris says Welcome to Flashing 55's. look forward to reading you again.
    Loving Memories


    Thanks For Reading
    Larry@This Blog Of Mine

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  21. you're good.
    this was perfect

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  22. Hilarious, Lorenzo. Perfect timing. I really enjoyed it.

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  23. oh i so wanted to know more! very nice.

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  24. i'm late at reading--but i'm glad i stopped by, it was worth it. i hope you enjoyed your time off.

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